Technology as Religious:
An Initial Connection Between Technology and
Religion
Introduction
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Background
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Thesis
statement: Although the relationship between religion and technology is still
difficult to explain, the concept of technology as a gift, which is providing
by God, stimulates Americans to transform the land into new Garden of Eden.
Body
1
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Topic
sentence: Bible, Genesis, and the Garden of Eden from Christian belief system
have deeply influenced to American initial interest in technology.
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Supporting
detail: Christian belief system influence technology.
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Examples:
Christian encouragement / the story of Eve and Adam
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Explanations
Body
2
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Topic
sentence: The development of technology is an approach that led human back to
the Garden of Eden.
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Supporting
detail: Technology helps to recovery the Garden of Eden
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Examples:
Francis Bacon
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Explanations
Body
3
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Topic
sentence: God leave the unfinished nature to human, which challenges the ability
of human creation.
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Supporting
detail: Nature and technology are given by God
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Examples:
John Milton
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Explanations
Body
4
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Topic
sentence: The ability of creating technology, which is given by God, destroyed
God given nature.
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Supporting
detail: technology helps to make pollution, destroying nature
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Examples:
Painting, The Lackawanna Valley by George Inness
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Explanation
painting
Conclusion
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Technology
as tools of recovering the Garden of Eden
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Christian
belief system influences Americans initial interests
Questions:
1)
Does
the outline meet the criteria we discussed on the 12th? How? How not?
I think my
outline meets the criteria we discussed on the 12th because I tried
to follow the paper “Paragraphs – a general overview”, which you gave us
before. In my outline, I have an introduction paragraph with thesis statement
and a final conclusion paragraph. Then, in each paragraph I have topic sentence,
examples and explanations. In my opinion, I think my outline might meet the
criteria we discussed, but my essay still need to revise a lot, such as more
examples, and more specific explanations.
2)
Would
it have been more helpful to make the outline before writing the first draft or
after? Why?
I think making an outline after writing
the first draft is better. When I wrote my essay, I did make a very simple
outline. However, with my thoughts constantly changed, I always needed to
change my outline during the writing time. Eventually, I throw away my simple
outline, and just wrote what I wanted to write. As the result, I think it’s
better to write outline after finishing the first draft.
